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31[ [Int. Ed's House. Day.

James near Ed, a very old man, he is very ill, James put on him the water, Ed's face is wetter, he will die, the eyes was closed, but his mouth is open, James stay near him, looking at him with an eye full of tears:

James:
Be wise! Be wise, Uncle, you must be strong, you'll be in good health, I promise!

Ed speaks ill:
Oh, Child, you're a very nice man, you'll be a right man, I'm, I'm proud of you

The door is opening, Tupère appears,

Tupère:
Oh goodness sake!

she let the door opening, James rise up, she came near Ed, James still looking at them, he closed the door, and going near them

Tupère:
How are you, Ed?

Tupère still looking at Ed, and hold with her two hand his right hand,

James:
I think Matilda will come with you, isn’t she? The last time in the 3rd day, she hasn't, when you tell me that you will come after 2 days, I think she'll!

Tupère looking at James:

Tupère:
She doesn't, maybe, Rose talking with her, or something like that, unfortunately they know that I'll came now, but they're not interesting,

Tupère looking at Ed sorrowfully:

James:
Rose, I know her, but Matilda! No,

Tupère looking at James:

Tupère:
You haven't get illness you too, do you?

James:
Why?

Tupère:
You go out that day, and it was raining, maybe you...

James:
Oh! No, I'm not. Ed hears all; I'd speak to him right now

Tupère looking at Ed, he opens an eye, Tupère getting more near to him

Tupère:
Oh god, you must rise, Ed, you must be fine, you must be strong,

James rise up looking at the door,

James:
They're not interesting! Shit!

We see James and he's very nervous. And we see too Tupère with Ed, suddenly, she cries and calling by his name.

Tupère:
No! No! Ed, Ed, don't going, no, no, Ed, no Ed!

James still fixed, he is fear, he doesn't turn at them, we still seeing her calling him and crying, James begin crying too calm.
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